Friday, June 27, 2008

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This is a tale of me in a town not so far away. The town experiences rather peculiar unchanging weather day by day: Snow 24-7. However, the snow falls from the sky so hypnotically and looks magnificent as it gleams and sparkles on its way to the ground. Thus, the residents of the town have dubbed the phenomenon as Diamond Dust. The quiet town where Diamond Dust falls holds many memories for me. I even nearly lost my life there once. It was the last time I set foot in that town ever again…

I was valiantly pushing through the endless snow to reach my home. It was evening and I was anxious to get home before the day darkened. Walking through a field, which was a shortcut to my house, I heard a melancholic voice singing:

I lie alone this lonely night,
Under the beautiful starry skies,
I weep because there is no one in sight,
No one beside me to hear my cries.

The voice sounded so sad that I was overcome by a feeling of pity and a sudden urge to meet the owner of the voice. After searching for a few minutes in the field, I managed to detect the source of the voice. It was a girl singing in a small clearing under a tree. I was surprised as I had practically played in this field when I was a child yet was unaware that such a place existed. Taking a deep breath, I revealed myself to the girl who was singing. She looked at me for a moment then her eyes began to water. Soon, she burst into convulsive sobs. I apologized and started to move away but she said: Wait! Alex! Don’t you remember me?! I’m Fay!!....after that accident I thought you were dead but…here you stand…how?” “But I’m not…” I began but she appeared not to have heard me. She rushed forward and took me into her arms, sobbing. I didn’t have the heart to make her heartbroken again. So, I held her in my arms while she cried. Soon, she calmed down and I told her that I wasn’t Alex. She apologized and said that I looked exactly like her best friend who died in a car accident not long ago. I told her it was fine and she nodded. For a moment, we stared at each other as if there was this silent thread connecting us. Suddenly, I heard a voice calling my name and I told Fay that I had to leave and I would return to visit her when I had the time. She nodded and we parted, reluctantly. Upon reaching home I got a lecture from my parents for returning late but it didn’t matter much to me. My thoughts kept straying to the pitiful girl out there in the snow and her plight. I made up my mind to go and see her again the next day.

To my delight, the next day came soon enough. Better yet, it was a school holiday. After waking up absurdly early(it was still dark) and having a quick breakfast, I immediately dashed to that clearing, eager to meet Fay. I found her there, gazing up at the sky as if wishing for something. I began to alert of to my presence but to my surprise she spoke: Are you just going to stand there all day?” So, I approached and greeted her feebly. She apologized again about yesterday and I assured her that there was absolutely no harm done. She then asked if I was going to be busy the whole day to which I said no. She looked happier and motioned for me to follow. I obediently did. She took my hand and led me to another clearing, one with an absolutely magnificent view. I could see the mountains near the town and the gap between the two mountains was the exact same place where the sun was rising. As the great illuminating star began to light up the dark day, Fay sang in that beautiful, sweet melodious voice of hers:

The sun comes up, the day begins anew,
I sit here watching as I did before,
But I do not watch it alone as I used to do,
For I have someone to accompany me forevermore.

I couldn’t resist the urge to ask why she sang these songs. She gazed off into space as if reminiscing back on the old times, then she said: “I used to do this all the time, with Alex…but now he’s gone and I have no one…” she broke off and continued to stare into space. I replied:” And yet you continue to waste your life here? Isn’t there something else you can use your time for?!” She seemed to shout back in fury: “I wouldn’t expect you to understand!! Alex was the only true friend I ever had!! And now my life seems so empty!! I never had real friends because the world hated me! And now that I’ve lost Alex and you came along I thought… I thought you were different! But it seems like I was totally wrong! Just…just get out of here…” and she burst into tears. I then realized that what I had said to her was rather harsh, so I sat down beside her and said: “Look, I’m sorry. Maybe I did go overboard by yelling at you but you shouldn’t give yourself false hope. Just face it, he won’t come back no matter how many years you spend singing all alone under that tree in the clearing. I may not be Alex, but I definitely don’t think you seem like someone to be hated. If you ever need a friend, you know where to find me.” Upon saying this, I got up to leave. Just as I was doing so, she said :” Wait! Can you drive?” “What?” “I said can you drive?” “Yeah, I guess I can.” I replied. She told me to wait in front of the school for a few minutes and that she would be right back.
I waited patiently in front of the school, not knowing what to expect and when I saw the sight that greeted my eyes I knew I had stepped into a whole new world. In front of me was a Porsche with Fay at the wheel. She motioned for me to get in and told me to drive. I asked her the reason why she did not drive herself and she told me that she was driving when Alex and she met with that fatal accident that caused her to be alone for so long. Not wanting to ask much, I got into the car and started driving. She gave me instructions on where to go and I could see that we were heading for the mountains that overlooked the horizon. “Isn’t this place restricted?” I began. “Trust me…” Thus I continued driving and soon we were at the peak of the mountain. We then got out of the car and lay down watching the sky turn from a brilliant blue to a bright shaded of orange. She thanked me for what I did earlier and told me that I had given her hope to start life anew. I told her that it was my duty…as a friend. She nodded and she seemed to understand. As the day was getting darker and dusk had settled, we decided to head home. On the way down from the mountain, an almighty tremor suddenly sounded, as if an earthquake was going to occur. The last thing I felt was Fay pushing me out of the car. Then, blackout…
When I came to, I was buried in the snow and I had to dig myself out. When I did, my first thoughts were to find Fay. I looked around and I suddenly saw the Porsche not far from where I was. I instinctively rushed up to it and looked in. There, lying unconscious was Fay who had selflessly pushed me out of the car and neglected to save her own life. I knocked on the door with all the strength I could muster to awaken her. At first, there was no initial reaction but after persistently going on for about an hour she began to stir. She opened her eyes and set her eyes on me. I motioned for her to wind down the window but the lever appeared to be stuck. There was no way I could talk to her at all. She put her hand on the car window as if trying to feel me through the glass and I put my hand on hers. Although our hands were separated by a layer of glass it didn’t seem to be there for us. We could actually feel each other through it. Tears began to flow from my eyes as I frantically searched for a way to get her out of the car to no avail. I even tried calling for help but in the desolate mountains there was no one to answer to my desperate calls. I then turned back to the car to find her waiting hopefully for me. With a heavy heart, I shook my head. She smiled, as if accepting that she was going to be trapped there. She mouthed ‘Thank you’ on the glass and told me to leave but I was reluctant. As a friend, how could I leave her out in the mountains alone to face the bitter cold, with no hope of escape? I continued to persist until she began to ‘sing’ to me. She actually mouthed the words but it was as if I could hear the words flowing from her soul, trying to convince me to abandon her:

Being out here in this bitter cold,
With a friend to warm my soul,
A friend who gave me joy and bliss,
I’m begging you leave me please,
If I cross over today or tonight,
The thought of you alive, in my sight,
Is enough to support and keep me strong,
Thus I’m asking you: please leave me, I won’t last long…

She then looked at me and I could see that tears had welled up in her eyes but she summoned up a final strength to say: “For my sake, go…” I could feel my resolve breaking but I would not let her down. I turned around and started walking down the mountain, crying, with her last words echoing in my ears. I gradually broke into a run and dared not to look back in case I suddenly felt the urge to go back there. After what seemed like an eternity, I eventually reached town. The first thing I did was alert the police and tell them to send a rescue team. Maybe, just maybe…she hadn’t left me yet. After that, I went back home and told my mom what happened. I got a thrashing from her because I came back so late and for being reckless. Had I watched the news this morning, I would have known that the mountains where very avalanche-prone at this time of year. Still, my mom seemed to understand and left me to myself. Obviously, I told my mom and the police not to tell anyone that I had survived an avalanche in the mountains as I did not want unnecessary publicity but word leaked out anyway and pesky reporters and neighbors would come knocking on my door. Eventually, I couldn’t take it anymore and left the town with mom. I even changed my name to avoid any further pestering wherever I went. The day my mom and I moved out of town, I turned on the radio in my car. The news was on. Apparently, a body had been found in the mountains. That would have to be her. I wept bitterly as I knew that she would never sing in that voice again. That voice which was so melodious and sincere that it even caused me to abandon her even though it was the last thing I wanted to do…
That was quite some time ago. Now, I go by the name of Adrian in the peaceful town of Sungai Petani. I live my life here as a normal person, going about life happily. But, sometimes, when the moon is full, I look out of the window and my thoughts wander back to the town where Diamond Dust falls. Huh? What was my name before this? Maybe I’ll tell you, someday…

3 comments:

benjamin said...

sorry if this is rude but.......

1.the time line confuses me, why would someone who's able to drive be scolded by his parents. even fay's age was not clear.

2. it clearly shows ur knowledge about cars....people never buy a porsche in a snowy town, because it a rear wheel drive rear engine car. basically, drive it on ice and ur dead.

other than these obvious points, i'd like to say that the story was not....properly explained. how did alex died, why didnt adrian juz break the window...yes, a porsche is a sports car, which means the glass is not bulletproof and can be broken by human.

in fact, i could almost guess that alex died the same way fay did, and maybe it was just another similar event. unable to forgive herself, maybe she planned the whole thing.

the language is excellent, except you dont know how to use it to ur advantage. the details are kinda left out, rather blur. i cant possibly translate your story into a movie in my head...thats what stories are supposed to do. u picture it in ur head, ur hear the dialogs, u imagine that world!

but heres the good side, u've got ideas, u've got langueage, u've got guts to use things u dont know like the porsche.

agree?

cooldevil said...

wow, adrian... ben seriouslly gave u some hutring comments, huh?? porsche...wow.. i didnt knw that!! lolx, anyway, keep it up...u will get da hang of it soOner o l8r

Anonymous said...

addie, first of all...

nice story i get the thing running up there in my head but you know what that guy was mean in the beginning and the ending is rather humourous.. but overall its a story that strikes deep

and yes the timeline was somewhat blur